Wednesday, November 28, 2012

Medusa Youtube Response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

November 28, 2012


Medusa & Perseus 

I never knew this part of the Medusa story and it is very surprising.  Back then it wasn’t even that bad of a thing for women to be raped or to be beaten by males.  Once she got her “powers” everything changed.  She basically switched roles with the males.  She was once afraid of them, now they are afraid of her.  She now had the power to make the males suffer.  It was fate from Zeus for all of this to happen.  Even though her father hid her away in that little room, it was fate for her to turn into that monster. Myth is a construct in my opinion because it has fate.  Something that has to be followed.  Just like a construct, it has to be followed.  So Perseus succeeds because it is a construct or fate for him to do so.

Monday, November 19, 2012

ENG 1510 Response to Alexander


Alex Gilkerson 

ENG 1510

Response to Alexander


Male qualities: 
-Strong
-Masculine 
-Protector
-Provider
  • Aggressive 

Female qualities:
-Caretaker
-Feminine 
-Cook
-Clean
-Caring

Above are five examples of both males and females that I thought were qualities that make them who they are.  I feel these examples can tie into his article pretty well.  I feel if a man is straight and is very masculine that he would write that way.  I feel if a women is very sensitive of feminine, that you could be able to tell by the way they write. To me it only makes sense that, that would be true.  The mix up in my opinion is if the writer is gay or bi.  It gets tricky because they switch social roles with each other.  So it would be hard for someone to tell if a gay man is writing rather than a feminine women.  Or if a gay women who acts a bit manly is writing, it would be hard to tell if they were a man or not.  It all depends on if they are gay or straight in my opinion. 

ENG 1510 Delpit and Smitherman response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

Response to Delpit and Smitherman

I found these articles to be very helpful.  Both articles were very easy to read and I could relate to them well.  When Smitherman showed the example of the essay with “bad” grammar, you could look at it two different ways.  One being very sloppy and bad grammar, or short and gets to the point.  I think it is okay to write like that in a way but only sometimes.  It all depends on the class you are taking and the instructor teaching it.  If the assignment is to explain your views on something it could be okay.  As long as it isn’t a strict english class.  If you are doing a research paper, I don’t think it is okay to write like that.  In my opinion, a research paper is more formal or professional and should look that way.
These articles also tie into our project 3.  Because it is OUR own discourse community, we should be able to talk or write however the group does so you can get an understanding of the community at its full potential.  This also depends on your discourse community and how you feel about it.  If it is professional, you should act and write professional.  If your community is like mine, the Snowcats, then I should be able to write how we act, talk, and write in the group.
These articles help me out in many ways.  Especially for the project 3, it made me realize I can reflect in a different type of ‘language”.

Wednesday, November 14, 2012

ENG 1510- Floyd Response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

11/14/12


Floyd’s Response

In Floyd’s article, it explains the differences between the way men and women act on different topics.  One quote that stood out was, “Feminist research and theory emphasize that males and females differ in their developmental processes and in their interactions with others”.  In my SOC 1000 class, we talk about how men and women share emotions differently.  How men do not cry and talk about feelings where as women share all their thoughts and cry all the time.  Floyd’s article also tells us how differently we right compared to each other.  When the females papers talk about connection and relationships, the mens papers talk about achievement and success.  This is very realistic.  You can see this in everyday life with just about everything.  For example, men get angry when driving.  Most women would just let it go if someone mad them mad while driving.  Or if a guy has a problem with another male he will confront them.  The females feel the need to be nice to them in person and talk behind their back.  This article portrays real life and is on point with all topics.

Friday, November 9, 2012

ENG peer review for Joe Miller


Alex Gilkerson
ENG 1510
Peer Review

In this paper I found lots of facts that support his idea of Swales way of a discourse community is wrong.  He explains in detail how he believes so and gives specific examples.  I also liked the interview questions and answers.  He asked questions that would dig deep and bring out how they really feel for music and how they got into it.  This was good because everyone had a different answer and was interesting to see other peoples views.  
The only thing that I found that should be worked on is that he contradicts himself a little towards the end. In one paragraph he explains how some people are in it for different reasons which is good, but then goes on to say that they cannot be a part of the group if they do not participate in the readings.  Depending on the group I feel this is a little wrong.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. Other than a few minor disagreements, It was really good.  It had an interesting topic to keep the reading from being bored. 


*it wouldn't transfer my comments, so they are in parenthesis.




Joe Miller
English 308J
Professor Nunes
July 14 2012
Expertise in Discourse Communities
A discourse community, according to John Swales, is defined in six points: a broad agreed set of goals, ways of intercommunication, ways of provide feedback and information, is comprised one or more genres, has specific language, and is comprised of new members and “experts” (471-473). In the interest of simplicity, the conditions above were re-worded for ease of someone not familiar with Swales’ work. Swales wrote this in “The Concept of a Discourse Community,” where he discusses a specific discourse community, a stamp collecting organization known as the Hong Kong Study Circle (HKSC). He applies his principals to HKSC and asserts they apply to all discourse communities. However, upon researching a certain discourse community, the Athens, Ohio music scene; it was apparent that Swales definition of a discourse community, which may have applied to the HKSC, needed to be improved(That statement really gets you on the edge of your seat.  It makes you want to read on and figure out what needs improved. )Specifically, Swales’ definition of experts and non-experts; which is not applicable in the real world.  
First, a brief explanation of what the Athens music community is. The community is based around seeing live, local music. The people that make this music, or bands, are mostly college students who do this as a hobby. Then at these events are frequent attendees who do not play an instrument. The community meets in a variety of places: Bars, houses, coffee shops, but always in Athens I find this to be an interesting topic and agree with all the points so far.)
Now it is appropriate to show the Athens music community, which will be referenced as AMC from now on, is a discourse community by Swales’ own definition. The goals of the AMC are to enjoy live local music; which have frequent and not so frequent attenders. Then the points of intercommunication and feedback, which actually overlap to a large degree, are through technological means like Facebook and online reviews from local organizations(What local organizations?) The genre is the local music(Is “local music” the only music played in Athens?)from Southeast Ohio, which is the only specific outlet for these artists. Then the members of the AMC speak in their own lexis, which is comprised of various slang terminology, references obscure music genres, and unique language for describing music. This lexis is very apparent in the experts within the community, which are the members who very frequently attend the events and obtain a level of “prestige” not associated with newer members. Then as mentioned earlier, a second way to obtain expertise is to be a musician playing shows for the community, which is the AMC’s basis. Swales’ definition of discourse communities doesn’t account for this “dual expertise”.
This idea of expertise has been discussed before. James Gee, who stayed away from the term discourse community, instead defined the term Discourse as: “(the) ways of being in the world; they are forms of life which integrate words, acts, values, beliefs, attitudes, and social identities as well as gestures, glances, body positions, and clothes” (484). Gee’s Discourse is slightly different from Swales’ discourse community, but the same principles apply. One of Gee’s points is that we go around “faking” expertise in Discourse. This is what he’d call “mushfaking”. When you are mushfaking, you are pretending to be an expert at something you’re not (I.E. bullshitting). This was Gee’s way of solving Swales’ problem about you are either an expert in the community or you are not --no in-between(I disagree with this statement.  I feel you can know a little bit about everything.  You don’t have to know it all, but you can know some.)  So by mushfaking, you can have some knowledge of the community, but still not be an expert. 
Mushfaking is only part of the answer though. The problem with some communities, such as the AMC, is there are multiple ways to be considered an expert(examples). This is what was kept in mind while researching the AMC.
Methods
Research was conducted in three separate ways: in person interviews consisting of four questions, analysis of online album reviews, and personal experience from my four years in the community. Due to time constraints, the non-personal research is very limited, only consisting of two interviews and a review from two separate authors.  Obviously this isn’t ideal, but it gives a general impression of the community and gives merit for further research. 
The interview questions were as follows:
  • How long have you been involved in the community and how long before you felt comfortable attending these events?
  • Why do you attend these shows?
  • How would you describe the performers at these events?
  • What sparked your interest in the community?(These are all good questions.  It would seem to get them to talk about there experiences.)The first expert interviewed was involved with a very popular music group in the AMC. In this paper, he will be called Steve. The second person interviewed has been attending events in the AMC for the past few years, his name is Billy. The names of the above interviewees were changed at their request. 
Then the online reviews were retrieved from the local radio station’s (ACRN) website. The radio station is actively involved in the community and ran by experts from the community as well.  Part of the organization is the Editorial department, which writes concert and album reviews. Two reviews were located from experts in the AMC. 
Results
Interview Responses:
Following are the responses to the interviews. First are Steve’s responses then Billy’s. The responses are arranged in chronological order and a comparison of the results is given immediately after. 
To the question of how long have you been going to shows and how long until you felt comfortable, Steve answered in an interesting way. Since he had grown up in Athens, he had been attending them since high school, but the second part is why it is interesting. Steve’s reply was, “Since I started playing shows”. This meant he gained “prestige” among the community in a way that a non-musician cannot. This automatically implies some difference from a person not engaging in the community in such a manner.  
To the second question, why do you go to shows, Steve’s answer was the obvious one, “To have fun”.  As to be expected from any discourse community, members get some sort of satisfaction or compensation for their participation(good information). This answer concurs with Swales’ agreed set of goals among discourse communities. 
Then the third question, how do you describe bands, provided another distinction between a non-musical member. This will be kept brief since the results of the album reviews provide a much better example of this point. Steve’s response was that he focused more on what the individual musicians were doing rather than band as a whole. So while describing a song, he might focus in on the guitar player’s technique and genre, rather than the overall dynamic of the band. 
Then for what sparked his interest in the community, Steve replied, “I’ve always enjoyed music and open mikes”. This answer is also to be expected – it implies he had the same interest and goals for joining the community that a non-musician would have. The question was asked purely to show the common ground that everyone has in the community – that they are all part of the same community, not two separate groups that meet at the same place. 
Billy’s response to the first question was: “I instantly felt comfortable; I’ve always enjoy music and being around it felt natural. I’ve been going to shows since I started college (Fall 2009)”. Billy’s instant feeling of comfort shows that he had nothing to prove to the community, that being present was enough to gain prestige in the community. It should be noted that after clarification, Billy admitted that he didn’t feel the respect of the community (expertise) till a year or so later. 
To the second question, Billy’s response was the same as Steve’s, “To have fun”. Once again, this was to be expected. 
For the third question, Billy’s response was, “Generally, I describe them like a person … a band is like a personality, every aspect of it defines who they are”. This was Billy saying he accounts for every aspect of the band; the big picture is more important than the individual pieces that compose it. 
For the last question, Billy gave an interesting response. The reason Billy got started with the AMC was not for a love of music, but rather a desire to make friends. Billy’s first college friends were interested in these events, so Billy tagged along out of a desire to cement their friendship. Then as time progressed, he found that he thoroughly enjoyed the AMC and decided to make it a centerpiece of his college years.(Good story to tell.  Everything isn’t the same which is good.)
Analysis of Interviews:
For the first question Steve and Billy showed key distinctions. Billy instantly felt a level of comfort within the community, but Steve felt he needed to prove himself. Steve being a musician, desired to “prove” himself to the community before he could feel comfortable. The idea of comfort is important because it gauges when they became an expert. Since a community like this doesn’t have defined roles, this is a good way to tell if someone has gained prestige within it. 
The second question both interviewee’s answered the same. They both had the goal of having fun while enjoying local music. For full disclosure, this question was slightly loaded since the answer was already known. The reason for asking it was to show that they are both part of the same community, since the have the same set of agreed goals. (This is a really good strategy to use.)
The third question also showed a very distinct difference between interviewees. When describing a band, they focused on different characteristics. As mentioned earlier, a more in-depth analysis of this distinction between musically active and non-musically active members is shown in the Album Reviews section below.
The responses to the fourth question came as a surprise. One would expect that everyone involved in the AMC would get involved because of a desire to see local music. However, Billy did so to make friends. A possible explanation for this could be that Steve is a musician, so he wants to hear music, while Billy not being one, just wants to have fun. It is appropriate to go over the AMC’s goals briefly: to have fun and see local musicians. At first it seemed like those goals were evenly weighted among the members of the community, but in retrospect, it appears not. The answers to this question show that a different goal is valued more by different members, with Billy caring more about having fun and Steve seeing fellow local musicians. (This really gives an outlook to the whole discourse community showing everyone’s views on it. )
Album Reviews:
The albums reviewed below are from popular college music groups. As mentioned earlier, these reviews were written by two experts from the local college radio station. One of these experts is a singer active in the AMC and the other is simply an active participant.  Their names are Hannah and Amanda respectively. 
Hannah’s review focused, like Steve, on the small pieces that make the entire album. Hannah writes, “They implement many of the same instrument techniques-- the heavy riffs, the electric guitar reverb and distortion and the organ-esque keyboards,” which focuses on the bands sonic styling, or, “Hull’s lyrical strong suits are more moving than they’ve ever been,” focusing only the singers vocals. It appears that Steve and Hannah concentrate on the details of music instead of the larger picture. This is mostly like due to them both being musicians, meaning they have a different perspective and take on a piece of music. (This supports that people are in it for different reasons.  Some people are in it for fun while people like Amanda have a passion for music and notice little things.) Amanda however, took the opposite approach to describing the album she reviewed. There was more of a focus on the whole, or its personality, as Billy would say. Referring to a particular song, Amanda says, “(it) takes a turn in the direction of greatness with soaring melodies and acoustics so epic it could conceivably have been recorded in a valley between blue ridged mountains”. This grandiose language is something you’d expect from a person not deconstructing music to its basic elements. The way Amanda and Hannah see music is like two people looking at a painting; Amanda sees how the scenery gives the feeling of happiness, while Hannah deconstructs the style of the painting and the technique that went into it. At the same time though, they are both appreciating the painting for what it is—a work of art. 
Conclusions and Implications
After analysis of the data, it was obvious that Swales’ definition of a discourse community is incomplete. It is apparent that musically active members treat the AMC differently than those who are not; all the while still being a part of the same discourse community. The reason for this peculiar dynamic is because what will be referred to as active and passive members.(Could there be 2 types of discourse communities? Something to think about.) An active member of a discourse community is someone who actively contributes to the community’s survival, in this case, the musicians who comprise the bands. Then a passive member would be someone who doesn’t actively contribute to the survival of the community. So anyone attending an event in the AMC would be considered a passive member of the community. Active and passive are not mutually exclusive; Steve would be considered an active member as well as a passive, with Billy just being passive. (Or there are just different roles in the community.) Defining the members of the community is important for discourse communities where members create the content. Another example would be a local sports community, let’s use baseball as an example. A high school baseball league is comprised of two groups: the players and the fans. The fans are the passive and the players are both the active and passive – the players are passive since they are still fans. By delegating roles like this, we can distinguish the groups in which the community is made of. This is especially important because the community’s survival is completely dependent on the active participants. If there was no baseball, there would be no community. Then the reason to consider them the same level as experts is as follows: baseball player’s prestige in the community is dependent on the fans. If there are no fans to watch the players, the players would have no motivation to improve their skills; they would receive no social compensation for their time and energy (remember, players are passive as well!).
It’s also worth noting that defining active and passive isn’t always necessary. There are cases, such as Swales’ stamp collecting club, where members are always active. This mostly applies to discourse communities that aren’t centered on a group of people performing an actively; meaning there aren’t performers and an audience. A case would be the members of a local book club. The club consists solely of the members and they are actively participating Kind of contradicts what you said above about how some people are in the community for different reasons.). If a member doesn’t read the book, they aren’t apart of the club, so in this case every member would be considered active and passive.
However, in the cases where active and passive can be defined, it is very beneficial to do so. By defining Hannah as active, we know to expect her reviews to be focused more on the instrumentalization, rather than the overall picture. Then if we want to look at the overall picture, we just need to go find out what Amanda thinks of the subject. It also lets us know that Steve has different goals than Billy( Again, contradicting the statement above.) for the AMC. So really by making these terms, we are giving ourselves a legend when looking at the “map” of a discourse community. 
With the combination of active and passive membership with Gee’s ideas of mushfaking, Swales’ definition of expertise is complete. We now have a way to a broad way to classify members with in a discourse community. This is only one piece of the puzzle though; more research needs to be done to classify a discourse community. With a little bit of thought, it is easy to see that Swales’ definition still has holes that were not addressed here. However, active discussion of these ideas among academics will eventually lead to a proper definition of discourse communities.

Works Cited
Cook, Hannah. " Manchester Orchestra:Simple Math." Rev. of Album. n.d.: n. pag. All Campus Radio Network. Ohio University, 6 May 2011. Web. 6 July 2012. <ACRN.com>.
Gee, James P. "Literacy, Discourse and Linguistics." Writing About Writing, A College Reader. Comp. Elizabeth Wardle and Doug Downs. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin's, 2011. 481-497. Print. 
Norris, Amanda. "Fleet Foxes:Helplessness Blues." Rev. of Album. n.d.: n. pag. All Campus Radio Network. Ohio University, 2 May 2011. Web. 6 July 2012. <ACRN.com>.
Smith, Billy. Personal interview. 11 July 2012
Smith, Steve. Personal interview. 9 July 2012
Swales, John. "The Cncept of a Discourse Community." Writing About Writing, A College Reader. Comp. Elizabeth Wardle and Doug Downs. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin's, 2011. 466-480. Print. 



Thursday, November 1, 2012

ENG 1510: Project 3- Intro/Synthesis


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

11/1/12

Synthesis 

I had many different ideas of how to start this project and which topic to choose.  I feel this is more unique rather than a sports team.  In my opinion it is more interesting as well.  This is unlike any other project we have done because of the topics.  On the other projects and papers, we usually had a one way path as to what we have to write about. We had our own choice to write about what we wanted, but it was all for the same purpose. This is different because we have our own choices and can take different paths than the other classmates.  People are involved in many things so it will be interesting to see all the different topics and how other groups and communities communicate with each other and how it is different from our own discourse community.



Intro

It was difficult to choose a discourse community for me because I have been apart of so many different groups or clubs in my life.  I have been on sport teams, and even a group for community service.  The discourse community that I have chosen for this assignment is the Ohio Snowcats organization. The Snowcats is a student run program for kids who enjoy snowboarding and skiing or if they just like to meet new people.  There are around 150 people in this club.
Every year, the Snowcats go on at least two trips as a group.  This year we went to West Virginia for a weekend to white water raft in the Lower Gauly River.  There were around 60 people to attend this trip. This trip was planned in a short amount of time due to the change to semesters.  Every year before, they would do this in the spring.  
The next trip we go on is coming up in the beginning of January right before we go back to school.  From January 5-12, we will be going to Copper Mountain in Colorado for the snowboarding/skiing trip.  So far on this trip there 112 people who have payed already and they are expecting more.
I chose this as my discourse community because they do many different things that other groups do not or have not.  It is a different setting for me because I grow up around farms my whole life and the way everyone acts, talks, and dresses, is completely different.  They all wear “skater” brand clothing and say words like “shred”, “powpow” and “gnarly”.  I have heard many of the terms before but have never heard someone actually say them.  Everyone in the group is very friendly and are very welcoming and outgoing.  I was fortunate enough to know a few people who are older, who are also in the group so it made it easier for me.  I noticed at a few meetings how they interact with each other and to new members.  They all seem to act the same towards everyone which I like.  
I will be able to obtain lots of information because of the weekly meetings and also the social activities on the weekends.  It also helps that I know the students who run the program so I will be able to get inside information on all the positions and how everything is run.

Wednesday, October 31, 2012

Ethnography Project 3 - Idea/ Proposal

Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

10/31/12


      For project three, I am choosing my discourse community to be the Ohio Snowcats.  The OU snowcats are a ski/snowboard group here on campus.  As a group or community, we have meetings weekly, and also events mostly every weekend.  The group has 2 special weekends throughout the year.  In the beginning of October, we went to West Virginia for a white water rafting trip.  From January 5- 12th, we will be going to Copper Mountain in Colorado to go snowboarding,skiing.  What makes the Snowcats a discourse community is by the way they talk, like the words they use, and also all of the gatherings there are.  They have a president, VP, treasury, and junior officers.  They are the ones who keep it rolling in order for everything to turn out correctly.

Monday, October 29, 2012

ENG 1510: Swales & Gee Journal


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

10/29/12


Dialectal Journal for Swales and Gee

Gee Quotes 

 “Language is a misleading term, it too often suggests grammar.”  This is completely true and I agree with it immensely.  Language isn’t how we spell or write it’s about how we communicate and the different ways to communicate.

“A discourse is a sort of identity kit”.  I feel my discourse would be sports.  Like in Brandon’s case, he says he doesn’t know much about sports.  Well I don’t know a lot about video games.  I focus a lot on sports and know quite a lot about them.

“How does one acquire a discourse?”  In my opinion, someone acquires a discourse by the way they are raised.  If my parents didn’t like sports and put me in them, I wouldn’t have an interest in them.

“We can also make an important distinction between dominant discourse and non-dominant discourse.” This to me means that in dominant discourse would be something you were kind of born into and a non-dominant discourse is something you get into over time.  Like joining a new church or being baptized.  

“literacy must be couched in terms of the notion of discourse.” This means that how you learn and your learning styles will be altered by the way you are raised.

Swales Quotes


“creating a false impression that such communities are only to be associated with intellectual paradigms or scholarly cliques.”.  This quote is basically saying that terms that discourse communities come up with are usually only known within their group.

“discourse communities have developed and continue to develop discourse expectations.”  To be in a discourse community you have to live up to their expectations or else the way it works could change.  Its okay for them to change but normally it should take a very long time because it could obtain large numbers of people.

“My own early attempts to be a full member of the community were not marked by success” To me this meant that he was not successful early on in his writings and that it took him years to accomplish. 

Sunday, October 7, 2012

ENG 1510 Response to Willams article

Alex Gilkerson

Eng 1510

10/7/12



          Try to concentrate on my response other than Beyonce, if possible.
This ad is for selling jeans, if you couldn't tell.  For Williams C.R.A.P. method, the contrast is a darker background to make her skin shine more. Repetition doesn't play a big role in this ad.  Her alignment in this ad is centered and takes up most of the ad so you will be busy looking ay her rather than the background.  The proximity is on the jeans they are trying to sell.  The brand is on the back pocket but is in the middle of the jeans in the picture.  When you look at what she is wearing(barely anything), you see the brand name.
           We read this article to show how to make something stand out.  Like in Williams example, it was clear what was standing out, just like in this picture.  These are two good, no, great examples of how to sell a product or how to catch someones eye.

Thursday, October 4, 2012

ENG 1510 Baron Journal response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

10/4/12


Dialectical Journal:

Are computers helping our economy? Are they effecting the way we learn to read?  In my opinion, it’s a yes and no to both questions.  Computers have opened so many opportunities coming into the 21st century.  They have helped run businesses by keeping records and even start online businesses.  Computers even help when writing a paper, like using spell check.  Even with me, I’ve used spell check and I haven’t even written a paragraph yet.  But are these tools really helping us? Social networks are attracting younger and younger people every year.  FaceBook and Twitter are definitely more fun than sitting down and reading a book.  Young kids learn how to read and write using these social networks.  They learn the wrong way tho.  They pick up bad habits like spelling errors like; r u there, what r u doin, etc.  This isn’t doing anything but hurting the young people.  And when they go into class to write a paper, they will use these “words” and think they are acceptable.  Before computers, there wasn’t anything like this.  Kids learned to read and write from teachers or parents, not FaceBook or Myspace.  
This article really shows were our society has come in the last couple decades.  In my opinion, it isn’t the best way to go.  We are teaching people the wrong way to learn.  If this keeps going on, in the future, who knows how bad it could get.  It is really scary to think about.  I recommend this article to just about everyone to raise awareness to where our society is headed. 

Wednesday, October 3, 2012

ENG 1510 My shitty first draft narrative


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

10/3/12


Shitty First Draft:

I cannot remember the first time I learned to read or write, but I really wish I could.  I don’t know if it just happened or if I learned a neat way.  What I do remember are different things that helped me out along the way.
I remember in I think 3rd grade, we had a spelling test and we had to spell the different types of words.  Like for example: two, to, and too.  The trouble I had was with “there”.  I remember I took the test at least three times because I couldn’t spell and didn’t know the difference between there and their.  After I did learn it, I don't think I’ve made the mistake more than a couple times.
Another thing I remember real good is the vocabulary books we had in 8th grade.  These books were little and orange and had all kinds of different tasks in them.  Each chapter had 3 sections.  The first was writing the definitions, second was matching them to an example, and last was filling in the blank.  At the time I hated them very much.  Looking back, I realized that they help me tremendously.  I learned different words and there meanings.  Also learned new study strategies.  I am really glad I took that class now.

ENG 1510 Hook response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

October 3, 2012


Summary:

This passage starts off strong and really grabs your attention.  The statement that she wants to “kill herself in writing” is a little strange.  Right off the back you want to read more.  She talks about her life and how horrible it was.  Then she brings in the topic of bio-mythography.  Her writings were definitely a type of these.  Hook told some pretty crazy stories and seemed a little nutty anyway.

Synthesis:

This article seem pretty similar to the previous article we read by Anne Lamott.  I think this because both of them seemed to be a little out there.  They both had strange backgrounds and wrote with a different voice from any other author that I’ve ever read.  Both were very interesting to read.  Those two are absolutely “unique” people.


Questions for Discussions:

1. The way I take it is that she thought she was never good enough for anybody.  And by doing a writing that was considered good, her image of a bad person would be gone.  So by writing something good, she is “killing” her old self.

2. Bio-mythography is a mix between fiction and autobiography.  I definitely think Hook’s work is an example of bio-mythography.  I think this because no one knows if these little stories are true.  Some of them seem kind of far fetched.  But some do sound like they had happened before.

3. The image hook uses is a combination in my point of view.  I feel she wants people to feel sorry for her a little bit and also to think she is a little crazy.  Like I said before, some of her stories seem a little unrealistic and some seem happen able.

Applying and Exploring:

2. I think we can change our identity through text easier than any other way.  You can’t see the person who is writing, you just seem the text.  They could say anything and unless it sounds unbelievable, you will probably think it’s true.  For example, if I said I was born in Asia and am 7 foot tall, you wouldn’t know unless you exactly saw me in person.

Personal Reflection:

This was a very interesting read.  Personally I enjoy reading from the “crazy” kind of people.  Some of the things they say really draw me in.  It is a nice change of pace to read articles like this and the one from Anne Lamott.  I’ve never heard of the term “bio-mythography”, but it is very easy to understand.  I feel you can really relate that to everyday people.  Everyone has that one friend that when they tell stories, some of the things they say you sit there and think, “that has never happened, that is the biggest lie”.  I always knew about this topic, I just never knew the name for it.  Overall, it was a well written article and very easy to follow.

Monday, October 1, 2012

ENG 1510 Brandt's Response


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

10/1/12


Brandt’s Article Response:

Brandt’s article talked a lot about sponsorship and how to enter it into your writings.  Sponsoring is basically a way to get your name out there by using a bigger name. For example, if I was holding a little league baseball tournament and needed more teams to come into it, a why I could do it is by having Gatorade or a famous Athlete sponsor it.  By doing this their name would be on the information sheet for the tournament.  What Brandt is trying to do with this article is to incorporate sponsorship into writing.
The article’s also talked about how there are still people today that are illiterate and can still drive.  To me this is crazy.  There are a lot of signs drivers have to read in order to be a safe driver.  There are many times when roads are getting worked on and one lane is ending soon or if there are detours.  I wish I could remember the first time I started reading.  It has been so many years that it just comes to me.  Over the years, I have absolutely needed to read.  It still shocks me that someone can go their whole life without being able to read.

Thursday, September 27, 2012

ENG 1510 #1 Project Rough Draft


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

9-20-12


Writing Constructs

The writing construct that I have been researching is the importance of a rough draft.  I have found tons and tons of different sources that talk about different ways a rough draft is relevant to writing a good paper.  One of the sources everyone will be most familiar  with is, Anne Lamott.  We read an article from this crazy lady and how she believes that everyone has a “shitty” first draft, or a couple of them.  Anne explains that no one can sit down and write the best paper of their life.  Everyone makes mistakes.  She feels that in writing rough drafts you learn from your mistakes.  
The author of “Keep your Rough Drafts Rough” in SparkCollege (couldn’t find the exact person), feels that you shouldn’t keep worrying about your grammar, spelling and punctuation.  He/she feels that you will lose your ideas and not get the information you wanted out into your paper.  They believe that you should write in short, quick increments.  If you write freely for 15 minutes, you will get everything that you are thinking at the time, into the paper.  After that 15 minute writing session, take a 5 minute break to recollect all your thoughts and to clear your mind.  Maybe even eat a little snack and grab a drink.  This author also believes that you must focus on the task at hand.  Most of the time you are writing something that doesn’t interest you greatly, so stay on track.  I feel any author or writer would feel this way too.  Another helpful tip they give for typing rough drafts is to save your work every 5-10 minutes.  I really agree with that, you could be typing and not realize your battery is about to die, or even your computer could crash.  Many different things could happen unintentionally.
The next author I found was Joe Landsberger.  Joe is responsible for the Studying Guides and Strategies website.  He believes there are 7 stages to writing a paper.  Believe it or not, a rough draft is number 5!  Below are his 7 stages.
  1. Develop your topic
  2. Identify your audience 
  3. Research
  4. Pre-write
  5. Draft/Write
  6. Revise
  7. Proofread
These are Joe Landsberger's 7 stages to writing a good paper. His views on the rough draft are that you need lots of time to think and write, a clear study room to where you can focus, have good preparation tools and research, and do a few pre-writing exercises.  I feel Landsberger’s way is a lot more complex and organized then others, like Anne (the nut) Lamott’s.  There are also a few things he doesn’t believe that belong in a rough draft.  He feels no rough draft should include a title, quotes, or any type of editing.  I will have to agree with him on this part.  If it is a rough draft then there shouldn’t be any revisions.  Not making revisions and then having a peer review with help your paper tremendously and will help you learn more to prevent from future mistakes.
An article I found that I think plays a role with rough drafts is by Joseph M. Williams.  This article is in our Writing About Writing book and is called, The Phenomenology of Error.  I feel it plays a role in my writing construct about rough drafts because the entire article is about errors.  An interesting statement that he says is that people think if they don’t have any punctuation, grammar, or spelling errors, your paper is perfect.  He compares this logic to a game of baseball.  “Nobody thinks you know how to play baseball by just catching the ball, there is a lot more to the game”.  This is very important to writing, you can have correct spelling and the whole 9 yards but maybe you didn’t frame it well or aren’t using the proper voice.  Many things alter your paper from being perfect.
To many people, a rough draft is pointless, boring, and a waste of time.  They think you should be able to write a paper one time, fix a few things and turn it in. I too believed all of those things before I started researching the topic.  It’s not that easy though.  There are many things that a rough draft will help you with.  Not only fix your grammar, spelling, and punctuation mistakes but many other things.  A rough draft or pre-writing assignment will prepare you for future papers.  Maybe the mistake you made a lot in this paper, you won’t make it again in a different one.  If you learn from that mistake, maybe during a peer review you will pick up that same error on someone else’s paper.  So not only are you learning, you are helping someone else fix problems.  It’s an ongoing process.  The best way to get started on a paper is to find a topic, make an outline of strong facts you want to bring up, and just write.  Just write non-stop for short increments of 15-20 minutes and take a small break of 5-7 minutes.  This process will get all your ideas onto the paper.  Once you do that, you’ll have a place to start.  You will have processed new ideas you want to bring up and you can slid them into the right spot.  As Anne Lamott says,”Everyone has a shitty first draft”.  This is a very strong statement and expresses her views toward pre-writing tactics.  This is reassuring to any young writer.  It gives them a sense of comfort to know that even the best and most famous writers cannot write a good first draft like Stephen King or J.R. Tolkien.  As a current young writer, I see where she is coming from with this logic.  It is hard to do anything once and be good at it.  The first time I shot a basketball I most likely wasn’t very good.  As I have practiced more, I have gotten to have a pretty nice shot (at least I think so).  There are thousands of pre-writing exercises but I feel the rough draft is most common and most effective, not only because you learn from your mistakes, but you can help others with the same mistake as well. 
Learning from your mistakes is a big part of using a rough draft.  Your peer’s or instructors will fix your errors and give you ideas of how to make it better.  You can do two things with that.  One, you can just fix it and move on.  Or two, fix it and analyze it.  You look at your mistakes, go over them, and actually understand why and what is wrong with them.  That is the whole point of a rough draft in the first place.  If you didn’t learn from your mistakes then you might as well just turn the paper in as is.  The whole point is to actually take something out of the editing to use in the future.  Like I said before, you might not help yourself, but you could help a fellow student.
Not very many, but some people believe a rough draft is a waste of time.  They think you don’t gain anything from it.  They think there is no other way to write a good paper than the first time they write it.  Those people are vulgar thinkers.  They believe one thing and stick to it no matter what.  If you look at the facts, a rough draft absolutely helps in just about every way possibly.  Once someone looks at it, they can give you more ideas about what to put into your paper.  They can tell you if one paragraph should be taken out or moved to some where else.  They can fix your spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors.  There is unlimited amounts of different tips people can give you to help with your writings.  I am not saying to listen to everybody’s opinion, because no one is right all the time, but to be open minded and take someones constructive criticism. Not only will it help you with the paper soon to be due, but also any future papers you have coming up.
There have been many times when I should have used a rough draft or some kind of pre-writing assignment, but failed to use one.  For my senior English class, we had a big paper due the first month.  Since it was my senior year, and it was supposed to be easy and fun, I kind of put it off.  We were supposed to get together with someone from the other English class every Tuesday and edit each others paper.  Every Tuesday, it turned out to just be me editing my classmates paper.  The due date finally came around and I did turn my paper in on time.  It took two weeks for our teacher to grade all of our papers (we graduated 112 kids so that explains how big the papers were).  I got my grade back and got a D on it.  From then on, I had to work my ass off to get to an A.  If I would’ve taking my paper serious and did the different rough drafts and pre-writing assignments, I wouldn’t have had such a hard time.

Wednesday, September 26, 2012

ENG 1510 Peer Review practice


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

9/26/12


Peer Review Practice
All around, this was a pretty good paper.  You had a lot of very strong facts.  I like how you incorporated the way you procrastinate before explaining in detail the other ways to do so.  I feel that makes your paper more original.  Also what really tricked me, is when you put off the assignment till last minute and had everyone thinking it would be terrible, then shift the topic to the teacher explaining how good your paper was, and how much thought you put into it.  That was a really good use of trickery.  I also liked how you put John R. Perry’s 5 step process regarding types of procrastination.  I can really relate to some of his ideas and logic.
I was a little weary on a few topics of this paper.  When you explained the 3 types of procrastinators, that was really good, but you didn’t explain the 2nd one very much, and the other 2 were in a lot of detail.  Another thing, at one point in the paper, it almost seemed you were encouraging kids to be procrastinators.  I don’t believe you should tell kids to try it, but for them to find out for themselves if it works the same for them.  Encouraging them to do so could possibly get them into bad habits.
Overall, it was a well written paper with few, minor and fixable mistakes. 

Friday, September 21, 2012

ENG 1510 #1 project Synthesis/Intro


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

9-20-12


Writing Constructs: Synthesis 

The writing construct that I have been researching is the importance of a rough draft.  I have found tons and tons of different sources that talk about different ways a rough draft is relevant to writing a good paper.  One of the sources everyone will be most familiar  with is, Anne Lamott.  We read an article from this crazy lady and how she believes that everyone has a “shitty” first draft, or a couple of them.  Anne explains that no one can sit down and write the best paper of their life.  Everyone makes mistakes.  She feels that in writing rough drafts you learn from your mistakes.  
The author of “Keep your Rough Drafts Rough” in SparkCollege (couldn’t find the exact person), feels that you shouldn’t keep worrying about your grammar, spelling and punctuation.  He/she feels that you will lose your ideas and not get the information you wanted out into your paper.  They believe that you should write in short, quick increments.  If you write freely for 15 minutes, you will get everything that you are thinking at the time, into the paper.  After that 15 minute writing session, take a 5 minute break to recollect all your thoughts and to clear your mind.  Maybe even eat a little snack and grab a drink.  This author also believes that you must focus on the task at hand.  Most of the time you are writing something that doesn’t interest you greatly, so stay on track.  I feel any author or writer would feel this way too.  Another helpful tip they give for typing rough drafts is to save your work every 5-10 minutes.  I really agree with that, you could be typing and not realize your battery is about to die, or even your computer could crash.  Many different things could happen unintentionally.
The next author I found was Joe Landsberger.  Joe is responsible for the Studying Guides and strategies website.  He believes there are 7 stages to writing a paper.  Believe it our not, a rough draft is number 5!  Below are his 7 stages.
  1. Develop your topic
  2. Identify your audience 
  3. Research
  4. Pre-write
  5. Draft/Write
  6. Revise
  7. Proofread
These are Joe Landsberger's 7 stages to writing a good paper. His views on the rough draft are that you need lots of time to think and write, a clear study room to where you can focus, have good preparation tools and research, and do a few pre-writing exercises.  I feel Joe’s way is a lot more complex and organized then others, like Anne (the nut) Lamott.  there are also a few things he doesn’t believe that belong in a rough draft.  he feels no rough draft should include a title, quotes, or any type of editing.  I will have to agree with him on this part.  If it is a rough draft then there shouldn’t be any revisions.  Not making revisions and then having a peer review with help your paper tremendously and will help you learn more to prevent from future mistakes.
An article I found that I think plays a role with rough drafts is by Joseph M. Williams.  This article is in our Writing About Writing book and is called, The Phenomenology of Error.  I feel it plays a role in my writing construct about rough drafts because the entire article is about errors.  An interesting statement that he says is that people think if they don’t have any punctuation, grammar, or spelling errors, your paper is perfect.  He compares this logic to a game of baseball.  “Nobody thinks you know how to play baseball by just catching the ball, there is a lot more to the game”.  This is very important to writing, you can have correct spelling and the whole 9 yards but maybe you didn’t frame it well or aren’t using the proper voice.  Many things alter your paper from being perfect.

Introduction:

To many people, a rough draft is pointless, boring, and a waste of time.  They think you should be able to write it one time, fix a few things and turn it in. I too believed all of those things before I started researching the topic.  It’s not that easy though.  There are many things that a rough draft will help you with.  Not only fix your grammar, spelling, and punctuation mistakes but many other things.  A rough draft or pre-writing assignment will prepare you for future papers.  Maybe the mistake you made a lot in this paper, you won’t make it again in a different one.  If you learn from that mistake, maybe during a peer review you will pick up that same error on someone else’s paper.  So not only are you learning, you are helping someone else fix problems.  It’s an ongoing process.  The best way to get started on a paper is to find a topic, make an outline of strong facts you want to bring up, and just write.  Just write non-stop for short increments of 15-20 minutes and take a small break of 5-7 minutes.  This process will get all your ideas onto the paper.  Once you do that, you’ll have a place to start.  You will have processed new ideas you want to bring up and you can slid them into the right spot.  As Anne Lamott says,”Everyone has a shitty first draft”.  This is a very strong statement and expresses her views toward pre-writing tactics.  This is reassuring to any young writer.  It gives them a sense of comfort to know that even the best and most famous writers cannot write a good first draft like Stephen King or J.R. Tolkien.  As a current young writer, I see where she is coming from with this logic.  It is hard to do anything once and be good at it.  The first time I shot a basketball I most likely wasn’t very good.  As I have practiced more, I have gotten to have a pretty nice shot (at least I think so).  There are thousands of pre-writing exercises but I feel the rough draft is most common and most effective, not only because you learn from your mistakes, but you can help others with the same mistake as well.

Wednesday, September 19, 2012

ENG 1510 Bernhardt IWA


Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

9-19-12


Informal Writing Assignment 

I really enjoyed this article.  It was a nice change to learn about gestalt and the effects it has with ads.  We see ads everywhere, from magazines, on YouTube, Television, and even on some walls.  We are surrounded by advertisements.  The tricky part is getting the reader/watcher into it and attracted to it.  Some ways people and companies will try to attract people doesn’t always work.  Examples of that could range from small letters, a lot of reading, no color and no pictures.  A good way to attract people is by the opposite of that.  You want bigger letters, less letters, more color, and more pictures.  That is,  depending on the age group you are trying to attract.  For kids through people in there late to mid-twenties, I’d stick with the colors and pictures.  If they are older, they might not like all of that and find it childish.  After reading this article from Bernhardt, it got me thinking of different ways to attract readers.  I want to take over my dad’s business and make it larger and these tips are a great way to start.

ENG 1510 Bernhardt Response

Alex Gilkerson

ENG 1510

9-19-12

Summary

This article is based on what we see and how we feel about it.  It tells us what gestalt s and how it plays with our minds.  Mostly in ads, they will have different strategies to catch the consumers eye.  This is a very effective way to get people to attend your function or to buy something.   Not only does it show the positive sides to gestalt, also the negative side.  An example would be if they are trying to sell you something, and the brochure is black and white, small text and a lot of it, and basically just boring.  That is a very big negative side to gestalt.

Synthesis

Compared to other articles we have read, this one talks more about the way we see things and how to increase the attention of someone reading it.  Basically if the information is boring, like black and white, not many pictures, it isn’t going to bring any attention to the reader.  If for instance the ad had pictures, bright colors, different shapes, different font and bigger letters, it will intrigue readers and get them interested in whatever it is you’re showing them.


Questions for Discussion

4.  I feel that instructors in High School made you write in a specific format so it was easier for them to grade.  It kept them all similar so they didn’t have to do as much thinking as to trying to understand everybody’s point of view.  I really don’t agree with this system.  It is not helping any student further their learning process.  The public school system is turning kids into mindless consumers.They teach them all the same thing, regardless of there education level.  The smarter students cannot learn as much and the slower students cannot keep up.  So not only are we supposed to focus on one particular format for writings, but basically every other aspect in school.

Applying and Exploring Ideas

3.  Gestalt in my way of saying, is kind of a way to represent something that you feel is important.  Like today in class, we were asked to bring in an ad of some kind to discuss with the class.  I brought in an ad for the Ohio Snowcats Organization represent an up and coming white water rafting trip.  The gestalt in this ad was not up to par in my eyes.  It was black and white with few words and few pictures.  You could tell it was printed on regular paper and copied a bunch of times.  It was promoting a rafting trip, yet didn’t have a picture of a raft.  They had a picture of the bus ride, the worst part.

Personal Reflection

This article was pretty entertaining.  It got me to think about different articles and ads that I see everyday.  It is kind of neat to look at them and kind of know where they are going with it.  Anytime I see an ad from now on, I will judge it on the gestalt.